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今夏感(七七律)
夏日荷池漾郁香,
今逢夜短偏,
碧山雨方,
野晚自,
淡水河夕照,
礁溪泉露春光,
炎蒸季台澎旅,
客呼幻。


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七律,真姑娘的好!尤其喜“碧山雨方,野晚自,”但有疑,晚似乎不仗;另外第五句及第六句的夕照春光也不仗,夕照晨光仗,然而自己以不必抱持守一成不的律,的操作,意境更佳。
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下所然有理,不用意太相似,有被之歉,所以特意避,多多教,此祝福府安好快,幸福美是!
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